What do you think of my essay on the Tell-Tale Heart by Edgar Allan Poe?

I'm an 8th grader as well, we've recently read that, and I think it's great. I would maybe just use transition words (for example, first off,) things like that-- that's what my teacher likes. If your teacher is a tough grade then.. B+ (nothing is wrong,.that's that just a point below for tough grader) but i would give it A, A+